Wednesday, October 21, 2009

Day 2

I wake up, tired and wishing I could go back to sleep. But it was just too cold. I shake Micaela and Jes awake. "Wake up you guys! Hurry up! I want to explore." Groaning they roll over and sit up. "But its still early." Protested Jes. "So." I said, "We need to get up and explore." "Fine." They grumbled. We get out of our sleeping bags and put them into our backpack. Then we get out our lunchbox and eat the remains of yesterdays packed lunch. "Yum!" said Micaela. "Lets go and explore." I said. "We need to find lunch and dinner as well." Micaela said. "Lets go!" Cried Jes. Also together we packed up the tent and gathered up all of our belongings. When we are sure we have everything we headed south to the JJM river. All we could see for miles around us were trees, trees and more trees. After about half and hour the river came into sight. By this stage we were quite hungry so we began to walk faster. Eventually we reached it. Then... "AHHHHHHH!" "Who was that?" I thought to myself, then I realised that the scream had come from Micaela. "Whats wrong?" I asked her. "There are big fat eels in the river!" she sreamed. I went over to have a look but the eels weren't moving. "They're dead." I told her. "O ok." She said. "’Im hungry." Complained Jes. "We coulds eat these eels for lunch and dinner." I suggested. "Yea!" Said Micaela. "How are we going to carry it?" I asked. "I know, we can cut it up into pieces and then put the pieces into three rubbish bags so we can carry a part of it each." I suggested. "Ok, lets do it." Said Micaela. So we pulled our pocket knives out of our belts and cut through one of the eels until it was divided into three pieces. Then I took the rubbish bags out of our backpack and lay them on the ground.
"They're going to be quite heavy, so on three we will lift together and put it into the rubbish bag." "Ok." They agreed. "1, 2, 3!" We heaved the piece of eel into the first rubbish bag and tied it up. "Right, lets go and get another one." I said. "1, 2, 3!" "GO!" Together we heaved the second piece into the second rubbish bag and then tied it up. Then we went back to get the third piece. "1, 2, 3!" "GO!" As a team we heaved that piece into the last rubbish bag and then I tied it up. Then we all picked up a bag and walked through the river. It was only up to like, our ankles so it wasn't like we were going to drown or anything. When we were at the other side of the river we sat down a decide what to do next. Together we decided that we were going to set up camp here on the beach for the night. "Look!" Yelled Jes. "There is another island not far form here." "It looks about 100 Metres." I said. "Yea." Said Micaela. "We could go there for the night and then that way we won't have anybody disturb us or steal our stuff." "Good idea." They agreed. "Lets go and set up the tent." I suggested. "Ok." Said Jes. So I dug the tent out of the backpack and took it out of its sleeve bag thingy. Then together we stood up the poles and put up the tent. Then we all put on our swandri’s and snuggled under our survival blankets. "Goodnight." Said Micaela. "Goodnight." Said Jes. “Goodnight." I said.

1 comment:

  1. Marvellous - here are two teaching points:
    1. After speech use a comma before the name of the person speaking.
    e.g. "Mr Woody, you are such a marvellous teacher," remarked the sycophantic student.

    2. You need to separate different parts of the text with paragraphs. I think just about the whole class need work on this. :-)

    Keep up the good work! You are one of my stars, so keep working hard and you could win prestigious awards.